Journal #5

Through the peer review process I have learned that my arguments are not as cohesive and connected as I thought. Also, my sentence structure can be slightly convoluted and can distract readers from the point. It was surprising to know that I was not explaining things as well as I thought, I always assumed that I over analyze to the point of redundancy.  My peers thought it was confusing that I had multiple arguments running throughout my essay. They mentioned that all were good points and supported individually, but each was unrelated to the previous. The perspective that I gained in the peer review was that I may need to prioritize and condense my thesis so that I can address the complexity of Wallace’s essay while consistently referring back to my main argument. Overall, the peer review was helpful in giving me the feedback necessary to achieve a higher and more sensical level of organization and more well stated argument.